Jasmine Hart

Abigail I sighed, glancing at the wallclock. It was a wonder that my husband hadn't yet sent the carriage for me. "I really should be going." I muttered, hating to ...

Brigid I had to get her off the ship. Granted, that had been the goal all along, but now it was more urgent than ever. I needed to come up ...

Woah. I've neglected this very badly. Sorry! Keturah I scowled, partly because I wanted there to be no mistake as to how I felt towards him, partly because it would ...

"Chapter after chapter" by Heather Sellers is great for longer projects. I love it.

This was great, very clever and perfectly articulated.

Ok, the first thing I'd suggest is to arrange this like a poem so it's not just a block of text, as it will make it easier for your readers. ...

Your imagery was very good, and your rhyming was handled well. I'd add full stops to the end of your stanzas.I think that your rhythm was a little off. Maybe ...

Lol. Nice! This was fun, and the rhyme suited the tone.The last line is great. Wish I could be more helpful, but I can't really see any major faults.

I'm not sure if I'm blocked or just unfocused, but I'm writing next to nothing, which is really scary. The first draft of my novel is sitting in a box. ...

I like the idea here, and your tone is perfect, but I think it needs a little tweaking. The first two lines were great, but I think the rhyme of ...

This was great gadi. The only thing that kind of jarred for me was when you twisted the syntax of "I'll have lovers plenty." Think it would sound more natural ...

Jasmine is getting restless. "Just going for a wander, iQuipple. You can keep listening here." She gives the other earphone to iQuipple and crosses over to the other side of ...

and put them...

There are a couple of ways to do this. Sam's way makes sense, but doesn't always work for me....sometimes, if I leave something, I never come back to it. Another ...

Ya. I'd be inclined to agree with you there, fireweed. I think it really depends on the individual.